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by ConcernedGamer
Mon Feb 24, 2020 1:55 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Last chapter was spent with Moronyx walking out Jewel's door like she wasn't his enemy, Jewel calling her mom like Moronyx wasn't her enemy, and the Crystal Gems pissing their pants in fear and awe because Moronyx is their enemy. That's about it, aside from the constant polishing the author does on...
by ConcernedGamer
Tue Feb 18, 2020 3:17 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

I can't even say that I need to analyze the former chapters any longer. The author has managed to attain enough coherence in his writing that it's more insulting than indecipherable. But I'll still sum it up for how stupid it was. After having been served the first bit of the Season 1 finale like a...
by ConcernedGamer
Thu Feb 06, 2020 12:02 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Chapter 4 gave us what was to be expected, honestly. Anyone half as savvy on bad fanfiction as me could see it coming. Canon plagiary, where the original character piddles around in the background, pretending that they exist. Before that happened, however, we also got served heavy-handed dribble me...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Jan 26, 2020 4:01 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy
Replies: 78
Views: 22059

Re: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy

Good to see this fanfic still being put through the grinder. To answer your question from a few posts back on how I didn't comment on the author’s self-insert appearing, there is a few factors to that. Aside from my eyes probably glazing over at reading it, and at this point finding it barely distin...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Jan 26, 2020 3:27 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

With what Chapter 3 brought us, this retrospective will be brief. Through past tense exposition diving into a flashback, the sex scene took place where the author forgot what Gems are. The - I don't know, passion? - that the author probably wanted to portray was nothing more than basic outlines for...
by ConcernedGamer
Thu Jan 02, 2020 2:19 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Let's do this thing again, look back and see what went wrong, aside from concluding 'all of it'. Because nuance in complaining is important sometimes. Moronyx got treated to the ol' millennia time skip treatment. Thousands of years of being extra powerful, extra important, extra adored, and extra b...
by ConcernedGamer
Wed Dec 25, 2019 1:22 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Okay, let's first take a look at the previous chapter, and for fun and kicks analyze what the author failed to deliver in it, going by characters. Onyx. The author wanted a male gem war hero badass who lead the war on planet Earth. We got a rush job of a male template described by looking like a ge...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Dec 15, 2019 2:38 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 6
Views: 801

A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

I'm just going to start off by introducing you to the summary of this M-rated story, A Crystal Rising, by the author ImageViewer. It's brief, it's bland, it's about as generic as you can expect from a bad fanfic. A Steven Universe Fic: Blood onyx is a unique Gem unlike the rest of his fellow home w...
by ConcernedGamer
Thu Nov 28, 2019 11:10 am
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy
Replies: 78
Views: 22059

Re: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy

There are many things wrong with this fanfic, but its lack of consistent tone has to be one of the fundamental flaws at this point. What the hell was this chapter? Who the hell is supposed to be entertained by this and its entirety? The author is still cramming on ideas ad nauseum, admitting as much...
by ConcernedGamer
Tue Nov 19, 2019 2:45 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 7617

Re: Inside Falls

Well, we're here now. Do you want to know when I started mocking this dumpster fire? The 11th of November in 2018. A year. It took me a year to chew through this diatribe of broken English, wasted source material, and identical plot lines. And of course this verse is the same as the first. Here's C...