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by ConcernedGamer
Tue Mar 31, 2020 1:30 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

I know I've acknowledged this fanfic as unoriginal. The sad part is that by that I had at least hoped to not be bored. I'm glad this thing seemingly is at it's last chapter, because it is doing nothing for me anymore. It's not over the top. It's not self-indulgently crazy. Even the promised harem i...
by ConcernedGamer
Mon Mar 16, 2020 2:27 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

There's no point in going over what has happened. It's not like it matters to this author. Welcome to Retcon Hell. Here's Chapter 9. Sorry it took a while, this chapter was supposed to be Finished on Friday but my Internet was cut. Literarily, while moving some furniture around and cleaning up, the...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Mar 01, 2020 1:53 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

In the last chapter, we saw the plot piddle on with what apparently passes for conflict in this author's mind. Moronyx shatters a sentient creature able to process the thought of a threat against its life, which the author probably thought was just a-okay after proclaiming it was a defective gem we...
by ConcernedGamer
Mon Feb 24, 2020 1:55 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Last chapter was spent with Moronyx walking out Jewel's door like she wasn't his enemy, Jewel calling her mom like Moronyx wasn't her enemy, and the Crystal Gems pissing their pants in fear and awe because Moronyx is their enemy. That's about it, aside from the constant polishing the author does on...
by ConcernedGamer
Tue Feb 18, 2020 3:17 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

I can't even say that I need to analyze the former chapters any longer. The author has managed to attain enough coherence in his writing that it's more insulting than indecipherable. But I'll still sum it up for how stupid it was. After having been served the first bit of the Season 1 finale like a...
by ConcernedGamer
Thu Feb 06, 2020 12:02 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Chapter 4 gave us what was to be expected, honestly. Anyone half as savvy on bad fanfiction as me could see it coming. Canon plagiary, where the original character piddles around in the background, pretending that they exist. Before that happened, however, we also got served heavy-handed dribble me...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Jan 26, 2020 4:01 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy
Replies: 80
Views: 25845

Re: Yugioh: The Divine Conspiracy

Good to see this fanfic still being put through the grinder. To answer your question from a few posts back on how I didn't comment on the author’s self-insert appearing, there is a few factors to that. Aside from my eyes probably glazing over at reading it, and at this point finding it barely distin...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Jan 26, 2020 3:27 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

With what Chapter 3 brought us, this retrospective will be brief. Through past tense exposition diving into a flashback, the sex scene took place where the author forgot what Gems are. The - I don't know, passion? - that the author probably wanted to portray was nothing more than basic outlines for...
by ConcernedGamer
Thu Jan 02, 2020 2:19 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Let's do this thing again, look back and see what went wrong, aside from concluding 'all of it'. Because nuance in complaining is important sometimes. Moronyx got treated to the ol' millennia time skip treatment. Thousands of years of being extra powerful, extra important, extra adored, and extra b...
by ConcernedGamer
Wed Dec 25, 2019 1:22 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic
Replies: 9
Views: 1924

Re: A Crystal Rising - an unoriginal Steven Universe fanfic

Okay, let's first take a look at the previous chapter, and for fun and kicks analyze what the author failed to deliver in it, going by characters. Onyx. The author wanted a male gem war hero badass who lead the war on planet Earth. We got a rush job of a male template described by looking like a ge...