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by ConcernedGamer
Wed Jan 16, 2019 1:55 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: The Danse Macabre (a mocking)
Replies: 5
Views: 3467

Re: The Danse Macabre (a mocking)

I have many questions, but these are the most grating ones. Is there going to be any part of this that will not revolve around sex and how it pertains to the protagonist? Will every new eye-candy get an elaborate or alluded backstory info-dump, to pretend they are not only there to be drooled at for...
by ConcernedGamer
Wed Jan 16, 2019 1:37 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

As far as crossovers go, I can mostly say that I recognize potential in what the author was going for, but its all - and I mean ALL - mishandled in this approach. It's a crossover overload as it is, where using just singular elements would be to its benefit. Undertale recast of Gravity Falls? Can b...
by ConcernedGamer
Mon Dec 31, 2018 8:30 am
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

Moving on to the second part of Chapter 5. The shopping's inside entrance,that was the first plaza room,was like any common shopping,but obviously abandoned,full of dust,and the escalator's weren't working,and much less moving. And all of this,added by the fact that the lights were turned off,maked...
by ConcernedGamer
Mon Dec 31, 2018 8:24 am
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

It didn't have to be like this. This fanfic didn't have to be trash. I can see the idea, the concept for this as a crossover, or an AU even, but we are nowhere near something acceptable. Take out the script rehashing, we have a single digit percentage of originality left, that is if you're even wil...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Dec 23, 2018 3:49 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

Second half of Chapter 4, coming up. Chara went to The Club,a place that was extremely curious because of its shape: the heart card of a normal deck of cards. Swing and a miss, every fucking joke, every fucking time. She went inside and found Peridot on a table with the club's menu on it. Chara tri...
by ConcernedGamer
Sun Dec 23, 2018 3:47 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

Merry Christmas. Another chapter has been mocked as you may have noticed, but I felt a seasonal greeting could be wedged in while I was at it. I'll hold back on a Happy New Year for now as I hope to maybe finish off another chapter before then, given that I now have vacation time away from my job. ...
by ConcernedGamer
Fri Dec 07, 2018 4:10 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

And let's resume with the second part of Chapter 3, Clay-Heads. Chara and Frisk saw Pearl pulling something from her car: a very tall coffin of black color. It's a fitting symbolism, because anyone who read this far is aware that the Pearl they know is dead. "Hey,can't you two help your grauntie? I...
by ConcernedGamer
Fri Dec 07, 2018 4:08 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

You know, I constantly find myself trying to rationalize why this is not a good take on a crossover. Consider a fanfic a piece of music, and a crossover a remix. Who doesn't like a good remix? But if the lyric gets replaced by a different song, the notes inverted, and the tempo altered, with only a...
by ConcernedGamer
Tue Nov 20, 2018 7:56 am
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

I have come to the point where I've boiled down my current grievances with this fanfic down to a single word. Substitution. This is a substitution fanfic. It's the same recipe but with different ingredients. The same room with different wallpaper. The same adventure but with different characters. Y...
by ConcernedGamer
Mon Nov 12, 2018 12:51 pm
Forum: Shitposting, Parodies and Dumb Shit
Topic: Inside Falls
Replies: 30
Views: 9565

Re: Inside Falls

And we move on with the second part of Chapter 1, Trapped Under Crystals. "Heya.",the one with the dark violet hoodie said as he waved for Chara and Pearl. "...Uhm,Greetings?",Chara said,trying to be polite. "Welcome,welcome.",Pearl said,bowing for the four. "We meeted at the graveyard. They are so...